Day 17 - Thursday
- sign-in; please note your availability so that I
can assign conference times
- papers returned in box tomorrow afternoon;
- new due date for third paper: Tuesday, April
II. Character/Action Review: Kemp
Volunteers share their Kemp translations as class
III. Car recall letter
- Who do you think wrote this letter? What is its
- Why is it unethical?
IV. Dynamic Actions/Appropriate
A. Comparing versions of the resume letter
- How do these different versions compare? How do
they differ in their action/character choices?
- Which is more memorable? Why?
- Which is more professional-sounding? Why?
B. Writing dynamic sentences
Students describe what happens in Shakespeare in
Love, using as many different action verbs as possible.
Homework: Bring to next
class 2-3 paragraphs from third essay. Any paragraphs -- we'll
be analyzing them at the level of the sentence.
Compare these two cover letters.
Dear Ms. Jones:
I write to call your attention to my
résumé. Yesterday, I had an interview with Carson's
campus recruiter, Mr. Tortorici, who noticed that I have
qualifications he had not seen in my résumé. Mr.
Tortorici told me to write you about them.
Mr. Tortorici said that it is more important to
Carson that management trainees have leadership skills than that they
have good grades. He could see from my résumé that I
did well in the University of Illinois's demanding program in
accounting. But he did not notice that my experience as a volunteer
leader gave me the kind of leaderhip skills that Carson is looking
Dear Ms. Jones:
I write hoping that I can persuade you to give my
résumé a second look. Carson's campus recruiter, Mr.
Tortorici, was impressed by some of my qualifications that he did not
expect to find after reading my résumé. Mr. Tortorici
suggested that I write to alert you to some of my experiences that
Carson might particularly value.
According to Mr. Tortorici, Carson needs management
trainees who can lead and motivate people, and Carson values those
qualities far more than grades or other academic achievements. My
résumé highlights my success as a student in the
University of Illinois's demanding program in accounting. But it does
not emphasize that I have proven myself as a volunteer leader who can
organize and coordinate complicated tasks and who can motivate
volunteers and contributors to achieve more than they thought